Revision

My second paper for the community unit, aptly titled Community of Single Parents, was not my best work, and felt it could benefit greatly from a revision. I seemed to struggle some with the writing prompts for our main papers, and this paper was no exception. My introduction and thesis were strong, but I missed some of the major points of the assignment and just feel it could have been better. I struggled with pronoun agreements and used the word “you” a lot. A lot of my sentences looked like this; “Being a part of a community has so many benefits.” Which are pretty vague and weakened my paper. I hope my revision makes my paper stronger and more convincing.